What do you think of my 2 poems? Comments and how I can improve?

POEM 1


Flowers open one by one each bringing you a cupful of spring


The flowers bloom to the blue sky


The delicate beautiful flowers lived to blossom


When songs of birds are in the air


when the buds are blossoming


smiling welcome to the spring


Soft lovely petals floating in the breeze


Light pink cherry blossoms carefree as a cloud


The sunshine gleams so bright and warm


Darting birds in the sky clear and blue


Beautiful orchard shine through


Eye catching colors in a field full of flowers


And reaching all over the meadows


Growths of colors are everywhere


With variant shades in a row


The sun smiles with a final glimmer


Spring is in the air


And you can smell it in the breeze


This is the sweet smell of spring





POEM 2


Once upon a Summer day


Birds chirped in a musical way


Grass with drops of morning dew


The sky covered in a vast color of blue


Here comes the warm summer breeze


Cotton clouds floating by


Baby blue paints the sky


Summer smells fill the air


As we play with out a care


Summer brings us nice warm sun


freedom


laughter


joy


fun


Dreaming long lazy summer days


Far of horizons


Flower fields amaze


Finding sea shells in the sand


To do all these things and more


At the beach and seashore


What a


peaceful


pleasant


way to spend a quiet summer day

What do you think of my 2 poems? Comments and how I can improve?
no offense but they aren't that great
Reply:I very much like the second one


i read it and it reminds me of a simpler time when i was young and used to play in my grandmothers backyard.


truly, i think the way you wove your words together is what brought me into your poem. it is something i can reach out and touch; very close to some memories of summer I have.


wonderful
Reply:"The sky covered in a vast color of blue"


just put "vast blue"
Reply:I like the second one. How the words rhyme and the rythm, great job.


I think the second one is great the way it is


the first one I would reccomend more of a beat to it.